Final Draft Essay

Open Posted By: highheaven1 Date: 23/04/2021 High School Homework Writing

Use the Rubric to revise and edit the first draft. After all revisions, it should be good enough to be made into the final draft.

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Category: Mathematics & Physics Subjects: Physics Deadline: 12 Hours Budget: $100 - $150 Pages: 2-3 Pages (Short Assignment)

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Argumentative Research Paper Rubric

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Refutation acknowledges the opposing view and argues it thoroughly and logically.

Complete mastery of the topic.

informed. I feel well informed.

The main claims are presented and directly relate to e thesis, but one or more may lack enough detail and development.

Yet, the essay is worthwhile reading.

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Good mastery of the topic.

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Central claims are present,

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