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Does Religion Bring Harm or Good?

Angela Evans

Columbia Southern University

Catherine Croston
It is best never to provide or imply a question to the reader when they have not read what you have to say on the topic. Instead simply state the topic or make it indicative of the thesis. These principles hold true for the body of your paper as well. Always state your opinion boldly and openly –


Does Religion Bring Harm or Good?

At the least, an overwhelming majority of people believe that the subject of religion is a

complex one; and that faith may unify or divide depending on how an individual or a group of

people interprets it. On the one side, religion never prompted adherents to be at the forefront in

the fight against discrimination and other forms of injustices. Religious people are usually the

last to accommodate divergent opinions, and yet their views may only be taken on faith and

never on the basis of facts and reason. Conversely, there are those who perceive and have

actually recommended religion as an effective means of resolving conflicts. While some

historical disputes could have been resolved on the basis of religious teachings, however, faith

has never been proved to be a reliable basis for enduring integration amongst warring parties.

Besides, religious people are still discriminating against such groups as immigrants and those

with different sexual orientation, with the latter category being deemed as misfits.

Had the harm that religions cause been confined to the lives of the moral agents and

hence not affecting anyone else in their vicinity and beyond, that would make it a purely

personal matter. Nevertheless, this is not the case; and because the detriment extends to the

society at large, the rest of the citizens are justified to cast doubt about the value of faith-based

doctrines. As opposed to the lessons from the parable of the Good Samaritan, for instance, a

significant number of White Evangelicals opted to remain indifferent to the federal government’s

family separation policy. The fact that they do not question some of these harsh measures against

fellow human beings makes it apparent that religion is, and as it has always been the case,

promoting tribalism. Contrary to this view is that religious people have embraced the civil rights

for women and Black people. Though this is progress, religion is particularly harmful since it

Catherine Croston
And are all religious people lumped into this group? Is this a fair assessment?
Catherine Croston
Obviously you feel strongly about this, but verbiage in an academic paper is important, so should be less accusatory-we are not fighting. It is a discussion of valid ideas and not solely opinions.
Catherine Croston
same as my initial comment
Catherine Croston
If you use the semicolon, then delete "and that", because a semicolon is used to connect two complete thoughts/sentences. Otherwise, use a comma.
Catherine Croston
It is best never to provide or imply a question to the reader when they have not read what you have to say on the topic. Instead simply state the topic or make it indicative of the thesis. These principles hold true for the body of your paper as well. Always state your opinion boldly and openly –


prompts intolerance; and there are many historical episodes when it actually caused all-out wars

and, therefore, religion is bad for the society.

Literature Review Preface

According to Denton (2019), there are numerous problems which directly result from

people’s beliefs about God. The information is actually in the public domain. At times, half of

the stories in such major newspapers as The New York Times relate to how religious convictions

have caused people to hurt others. One popular case in point is that Seung-Hui who shot and

killed 32 people at the Virginia Polytechnic Institute in Blacksburg, Virginia, in 2007. His

mother to was a devout Christian who schlepped the young Seung-Hui from one church to

another in search of exorcism (Schwadel & Garneau, 2019). While the people’s attention is

currently bound up in the competing ideas about the nature of God, religious-based intolerance

and violence continues. Curtis & Johnson (2019) note that certain kinds of religious infatuation

certainly lead to serious problems, and the public is slow to acknowledge religion’s causal role in

conflicts due to the respect accorded to faith.

Discussion of the Controversy

Throughout history, societies have allowed for the sphere of protection to exist around

religions. Traditionally, it has been taboo to criticize the religious views of others. Denton (2019)

argues that this is dangerous since it allowed the propagation of unexplored views from

generation to generation. Curtis & Johnson (2019) agree, and add that had there been open

debate right from the start, some of these ideas would have been debunked in time. According to

Puckett et al. (2018), it is surprising that someone can be a neurosurgeon, and hence be one of

the most educated people on Earth, and still believe in the promise of the 72 Virgins in Paradise.

The perpetrators of the shocking crimes are usually willing to die for what they believe. They

Catherine Croston
You need to think more about exactly what it is you are arguing and for which you can provide two equally strong opposing references in the review of literature.


focus on the rewards which may only be attained after the Earthily life is over. Brauer (2018)

disagrees with the argument that religion is uninvestigated, and insists that doubts about faith

have been expressed since the beginning of belief itself.

At a personal level, region harms people since it is impacted on someone’s mind through

indoctrination. This means that individuals are rarely taught critical thinking skills. With lack of

critical thinking skills, someone can believe in anything. Denton (2019) argues that most of the

parents who refuse vaccines for their children identify as religious; and they mostly do so since

their religious leaders has said that vaccines are bad. According to Puckett et al. (2018), religion

teaches the virtue of being satisfied with little or no knowledge. Indeed, children who doubt what

they are being taught are shamed, even by their own parents. In addition to the shame, the

children are made to endure long-lasting fear of the hell-fire. That fear linger way into the

adulthood. Curtis & Johnson (2019) indicate that religious people participate in sexual shame,

and they particularly disgrace people for their sexual inclination. This makes life difficult for the

LGBTQ community who are compelled to keep on explaining themselves rather than living and

enjoying their lives. The LGBTQ community is besides itself since these individuals are made to

think that they will never be good enough for God, at least until they renounce their immorality

(Sherkat & Lehman, 2018).

Religion facilitates many things for the adherents; and Ngamaba & Soni (2018) argue

that these include a sense of community, hope, and support. Nonetheless, such benefits can still

be drawn from the real world. Schwadel & Garneau (2019) insist this should actually be the goal

since supposing one based their actions and beliefs on incorrect myths, at least some of the

actions they take will be irrational. This underscores the urgent need for people to work towards

ensuring that their beliefs conform to the evident of reality. Religion, unfortunately, is based on


the assumptions of the questions people might ask and not even the questions they have really

asked. Consequently, the exploration of certain aspects of the world and life is curtailed right

from the onset (Puckett et al., 2018). The nature of religion is that adherents will certainly end up

with exclusionary communities, as opposed to creating a global society. If societies across the

world based their decisions and collective actions on the realities shared by everyone, most of the

problems triggered by religion would disappear.

Literature Review Conclusion

The challenge in debating the pros and cons of religion is the people’s reluctance to admit

that faith drives people to commit atrocities. Indeed, even the secular and nonreligious people do

not admit that someone’s belief can, for instance, compel them to engage in suicide bombings or

to shoot at young and innocent children. According to Ngamaba & Soni (2018), such actions are

perceived as having been brought about by psychological aberration. Brauer (2018) blames

political policies as well as economic desperation as the causes. Nonetheless, Curtis & Johnson

(2019) has concluded that metaphysical beliefs are the predominant catalysts. A significant

number of the perpetrators come from economically stable backgrounds, and tend to have

attained advanced education. Army psychiatrist Nidal Malik Hasan came from a stable

background and had a rewarding career, yet he went ahead to hurt 43 innocent people, and 13 of

them lost their lives (Denton, 2019). These problems are precipitated by metaphysical beliefs,

and hence religion is dangerous for the society.



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the Scientific Study of Religion, 57(4), 654–675. https://doi.org/10.1111/jssr.12551

Curtis, E.E., & Johnson, S.A. (2019). Transnational and diasporic future of African American

religions in the United States. Journal of the American Academy of Religion, 87(2), 333–

365. https://doi.org/10.1093/jaarel/lfz018

Denton, B.K. (2019). Is this America? Unfinished business with the U.S. national imaginary,

religion and violence. Dialog: A Journal of Theology, 58(1), 30–38.


Ngamaba, K.H., & Soni, D. (2018). Are happiness and life satisfaction different across religious

groups? Exploring determinants of happiness and life satisfaction. Journal of Religion &

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Puckett, J.A., Wolff, J.R., Gunn, H.A., Woodward, E.N., & Pantalone, D.W. (2018). An

investigation of religion and spirituality of sexual minorities in the United States:

Exploring perceptions, intrinsic religiosity, and out-ness to religious communities.

International Journal for the Psychology of Religion, 28(3), 145–161.


Schwadel, P., & Garneau, C.R.H. (2019). Sectarian religion and political tolerance in the United

States. Sociology of Religion, 80(2), 168–193. https://doi.org/10.1093/socrel/sry032

Sherkat, D.E., & Lehman, D. (2018). Bad Samaritans: Religion and anti‐immigrant and Anti‐

Muslim sentiment in the United States. Social Science Quarterly (Wiley-Blackwell),

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